Alright man, this is my favorite fed in fan fic right now, and this is one show that I have been checking back often to see if you had it posted. Now it's finally here and just from the hype post in the fed thread I already know that you put some serious TLC into this. So much incredible build up it's just outstanding. Let's dig in.
First thing first I like how you use music. Music is one of the most important things in wrestling to me. Use the right music at the right time and you have magic. The music is probably the major reason I'm such a diehard ECW fanboy.
MAN! That recap! So fucking awesome. This fic is running on all cylinders and has been all year imo. I think you have really risen up and taken the crown here man. It's been fun to keep up with.
That recap opening really put me into this setting and refreshed all of the past couple of shows perfectly. I just really love the underlying theme of this promotion, Kurt Angle's mission statement, the suit filed by WWE that pulled out all of WPW's big draws, and most of all the "December 2012 to March 2013" era where this fed really came to life. The characters have been really well defined with a lot of depth to them, and that's what keeps me coming back to this fed. You do a great job of getting me to actually give a shit about these fictional characters, wanting to see what happens next in their stories.
The graphics and pictures all look fantastic.
Del Sol pays tribute to one of the greatest Japanese high flyers of all time(at least my favorite anyways). My god man, this dude is now one of the most over wrestlers in this universe that I'm picturing in my head. Awesome. He better fucking win this match!
Del Sol vs Dutt starts off a little slow, but my god does it pick up! Some well placed near falls. This one just heats up into a pressure cooker in the late moments, the 450 Corkscrew Senton, you fucker. I have to try to top this with Rey vs Juvy. I have my hands full.
Dutt's looking good here. Del Sol is shining pretty brightly, but your writing the match whereas not to make Dutt look like a chump. More great nearfalls. Wow, great opener.
Pretty good finish. Fuck that, OUTSTANDING finish to this match. My god. The bar has been raised. Reading your high flying matches makes me realize that I'm really a bit behind the game when it comes to this style. I'm still just so used to the old school luchadores, but this new generation of guys really took that shit to the next level. Del Sol is amazing. This match was great man.
Dutt just got caught. It happens. Good booking. He's still maintained some importance here and that's hard to do if you really want to make the other guy look good, and I think you pulled that off here with the finish/aftermath.
The Super Crown Division had stolen the show, and it had only just begun.
No kidding. Your cruserweight style matches are just phenomenal man. This match and the one on your last episodic show was out of this world. This is something I believe you are better at than anybody in fan fic right now, myself included.
Del Sol is a huge deal in this fed right now. Incredible job of debuting him man. He's immediately an impact player. I hope to see him pushed in the next couple of shows.
Hass vs Benjamin is the weakest storyline going into this show, but this little opening here has me interested.
The early parts of the match read to be a fantastic shoot style match that I really liked. You put a lot of emphasis on their background, and while I'm very unfamiliar with it, you wrote it out well enough for me to really get why it's coming into the psychology of the match.
I don't know about the later parts of the match. I felt like the psychology was kind of lost as the moves just started coming at me fast.
The third paragraph of the match starts to level back out. Some really good sequences with the false finishes/near falls. That's another one of your strengths as far as match writing.
I'm feeling the urgency here in this match. Very well done. Neither one of them can afford to lose. The booking coming into this match plays into that well. I'm feeling it.
I don't know about the finish being so definitive. I would have liked maybe a big reversal or some big counter into a rollup. I know the last match ended that way, but the way this match was flowing I don't know if this was the proper ending. At this point in the review I'm pretty much nit picking to find something negative to talk about. Really at the end of the day that was another really well planned out match that was a very good read.
One thing that I think could have made this match a lot better is the selling. I would have liked to have seen the selling fleshed out and milked much more. I don't mind skipping the selling in the fast paced lucha style matches for the sake of action, but a match like this could have used the selling nob turned up a few notches.
I like the respect and class in this final match for these two. Good way to bring it all to an end and push them their own separate ways.
Wow, great promo. I've never seen a real Homicide promo, but this one was awesome.
You also do a fantastic job of recapping storylines with as few words as possible. This is something that is very important to do, but for me as a writer I really hate doing it. It's the part of writing a fan fic that feels the most like work. If you want to know the story go back and read it. It's hard enough to get people to read a new show, let alone one from last year. That's a big part of what keeps me interested in WPW though, I'm constantly reminded of what's going on.
Battle of the Blades 3, great feud. Nakajima throws technique out the window and just tries to kill him, letting his emotions get the best of him. I like it. Psychology 101.
This reads to be just a really dynamic, fast paced shoot style fight with both guys being really explosive and stiff. I'm reading this and I can't help but imagine Frank Shamrock for some reason. Both of these characters give me Frank Shamrock
vibes, just really dynamic, well rounded, explosive athletes that have sharp technical skills.
Nakajima going crazy with German's, I liked that spot. This is a really good battle that reads like a fight, yet it still has pro wrestling psychology & storytelling. This is what I love the most about this fed.
Ki can't get away from that Ankle lock. Damn.
This began the most heart stopping sequence of near falls – Low Ki and Nakajima would both trade blows, an exhilarating sequence of irish whips, attempted Roundhouse and Flying Calf Kicks, ducks and dodges - and nail each other first Low Ki with the Dragon Wing Underhook Suplex, but moments later after a sequence of stiff kicks a Fireman's Carry Powerbomb by Nakajima – until Low Ki fought back and devastated the challenger with a final Ki Krusher 99' Fisherman Driver at the end.
I feel like your really trying to put over the speed of the action here, but this sequence just doesn't read very well. It reads like your mind was going too fast for your typing, I don't know. Slow down a little and give me some drama.
a look of understanding at how far Nakajima had brought him was now dawning.
I like little things like this in a match. I could see that look when I read it. Nice. The dramatic last stand for Nakajima, I love this match. Some great psychology. Nakajima blasting Ki with chops while he's a worn down broken man, high drama dude. This is awesome!
Double countout after a sick fucking reversal to the concrete floor. Anyone who thought that was unrealistic just point them to the 2 Cold Scorpio vs Shane Douglas match in ECW where Douglas powerbombed the shit out of Scorpio on concrete in one of the sickest bumps I've ever seen. These guys are professionals. They know how to take bumps. I hated it when a couple of reviewers nitpicked my concrete bumps in The Buyout a while back. It's fucking fiction man!
Normally I would be up in arms over a double countout finish. I HATE finishes like this normally, but really and truly you made it work very well here. I felt like it was appropriate after such a battle. It makes sense with the booking of the feud. I liked it. Outstanding match.
There are several characters here in this universe that I have no idea who they are or what they look like, yet I'm still invested in them because of the way you write them. Nakajima is one of those characters. This is a mark of a great fan fic writer.
This next match is what I paid to see.
Your going full on Exploding Barbed Wire. MAN! I love these matches, but I'm almost embarrassed to admit it. It's such a bloody, gory sight. When done properly it does't get anymore dramatic than an Exploding Barbed Wire Death Match.
The referee in the shiny fire suit, I'm marking out right now.
Man THIS IS TENSE!
The 15 minute timer! This is already my new show of the year. I'm glad to see you're doing this right. All of the small things are here so far. The little details that give me the perfect image in my head. Good god man. This is great.
Yep, love this. This feeling is what I love the most about these matches. The battle to stay away from the wire. The tension. The urgency, the nervousness.
Nice tease with Morrison hitting a baseball slide to avoid the wire.
Ah, man the first wire spot. NO SELLING!?!?! C'mon man! Tanaka shouldn't have just fired back from that. I need to see his face. The pain. The agony!
Tanaka's one tough mofo, god damn! I see what you are going for but that first wire spot should have brought him to his knees. Have him hulk up from it, but still give me some pain. I think all wire spots should be milked to death with the selling in these matches. I see where you're going with this though seeing as Tanaka's gimmick was that he could hulk through the most agonizing of pain because his heart was unstoppable. Maybe this wasn't as big of a deal as I'm making it out to be.
I did really love the image of Tanaka emerging from the cloud of smoke with the elbow.
Overhead belly to belly into the wire, SHIT!
The powerbomb into the side of the cage spot was very well done. Big blast that knocks the ref down. Nice details. Things like that make these matches imo.
The smoke is another small detail that really makes this fun to read and picture.
This is BRUTAL!
This is the most brutal match I've read in fan fic ever. It's not even over yet. Touche'.
FUCK! FUCK! FUCK!
This is over the top MADNESS! I FUCKING LOVE IT!
And the timers running down, you could cut the pressure with a knife. GOD DAM I LOVE IT!
There's the big boom. That should have finished it all, but Morrison's climbing up the cage so I'll give it a chance.
Awesome description of the chase up the cage. That read like a chase from a horror movie, or a crazy fight scene from an action movie. I really like reading shit like this. Morrison makes his way to the top in agonizing pain before
Well man, that is officially one of the greatest matches I've ever read in fan fic. Match of the year. Insanity. Great finish. Just an all out war the likes of which we rarely ever get in fan fic. I can't sing enough praises for this. It had a couple of things I would have done differently, but still, I don't know what anybody can do to compete with this. Add in the storyline behind the match and you have solid gold. Well done man.
Then the aftermath paragraph where humanity sinks in for everyone that just sat through that macabre of violence. Oh my god dude. I give this whole segment a 11/10.
This show is just getting started is what the scary part is.
This is a fucking beast of a show.
I got to be honest with you, I think the Barbed Wire match should have been latter in the card. It's going to be hard for me to get into this Silver Championship match after such a crazy ride in that last match.
Nice little brawl nonetheless.
Continuing with my brutal honesty, I'm really having a hard time getting into this match. I can't help but keep thinking of that crazy previous match. I'm just not feeling this one. I think maybe it should have been a bit shorter as kind of a cool down. It's just a really complex match that I'm having a hard time digesting because that last match desensitized me a little, which is wildly interesting and a tribute to just how good that barbed wire match was.
Here comes Low Ki with a run in that costs Goto his shot at the title. He was so fucking close. This was some good booking to build these guys up as heels and build up some heated future matchups. Nice.
That's a really nice song that fits this moment perfectly.
Tanahashi is another character that I know nothing about in real life, but he's a fucking warrior in this fed. One of my favorite characters in fan fic right now. Glad to see a pic of him finally. That's pretty close to what I pictured.
My Own Summer is AJ Styles entrance music? PERFECT! SHIT! WHY DIDN'T I THINK OF THAT! Genius.
AJ Styles is a top character in fan fic right now imo. Loving how you brought him into this fed, and I'm compelled to see how his story unfolds. The Deftones music really sets it all off.
Tanahashi shines like the face should early on, displaying a more ruthless side than before. So far so good. This feels like a main event and you've done a swell job of bringing me back down to earth from the barbed wire massacre with the intros/recaps/music.
Styles works his way into the match and dominates. So far this had a great flow to it. Really easy to read. One of the better matches of the show so far. It feels like maybe you wrote this show from the top down because I'm not getting those burned out vibes that one would usually give at the late stages of such a deep show.
I'm getting through this second paragraph and this is a really well written match. It's not just move to move, there's some good transitions and a lot of small little things you do to add to the drama and intensity of it. Also flows really nicely from sentence to sentence. It doesn't feel forced.
Tanahashi is written as a glorious peoples champion of a face throughout the match. I really like that.
Sweet counter from the Cloverleaf into the Figure Four.
Excellent finish. Great match. Some of your best actual writing here, especially the way you wrote out the finish. Styles earns a contract and a title shot. Really good story going here. I can't wait for what happens next.
More great music man. So fitting. Sets a great atmosphere. This show is getting into epic territory.
I'm a little exhausted really at this point, but this intro and recap really brings my enthusiasm back to life. Really well done man. The music and the recap of the story going into this has me pumped to read it. Such a fantastic job of building this up as the "Big Fight" main event.
Another really good fight with wrestling style psychology here. I don't think it's as good of a match as Tanahashi vs Styles or the Barbie, but it's just a really heated, sporty, fight. Kenta gets busted open and now we have a ref bump. Oh shit.
Chaos ensues. Tanahashi blasts Joe and keeps their rivalry hot. Man! Tanahashi costs Joe the belt. Shit is about to HIT THE FAN!
That closing paragraph was amazing and keeps me wanting more man. This show was really, really, really good. Epic.
Spinal Tap treatment. The Bar-B-Que was a fucking balls to the wall battle that will probably never be topped in fan fic. It was so easy to picture and I pictured a fucking hardcore classic that probably would have brought quite a bit of controversy to the promotion. There's a lot of great stuff here. I truly believe you are one of the elites of Fan Fic and you proved it with this show.